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sparky71 · 18-10-08

Heard this at a peotry reading last week. Its my favourate poem at the momment and it's written by a published poet who lives in my fair old city Cardiff. Its called the beatiful lie, hope u enjoy.

He was about four, I think...it was so long ago.
In a garden, he'd done some damage
behind a bright screen of sweet peas
snapped a stalk, a stake, I dont recall,
but the Grandmother came and saw, and asked him
"Did you do that?"

Now, if she'd said why did you do that,
he'd never have denied it. She showed him
he had a choice. I could see in his face
the new sense, the possible. That word and deed
need not match, that you could say the world
different to suit you.

When he said "NO", I swear it was as moving
as the first time a baby's fist clenches
on a finger, as momentous as the first
taste of fruit. I could feel his eyes looking
through a new window at a world whose form
and colour weren't fixed

but fluid that poured like a snake, trembled
around the edges like northen lights, Shape shifted
at the spell of a voice. I could sense him filling
like a glass, Hear the unreal sea in his ears.
THIS IS HOW TO MAKE SONGS, CREATE MEN, PAINT PICTURES,
TELL A STORY.

I think I made up the screen of sweet peas.
Maybe they were beans. maybe there was no screen
it just felt as if there should be somehow.
And he was my, no, i dont need to tell you that.
I know I made up the screen. And I recall very well
what he had done.

Sheenagh Pugh

fjp999 · 18-10-08

Great poem Sparky. I can understand why it is one of your favs.

So simply told and such vivid images and feelings... then the twist at the end brings you into the writers mind... very interesting style and I thank you much for posting it.

Please keep posting more and if you dont mind maybe you can post more of your originals even if they arent ready for public viewing... I enjoy seeing how things develop...

thanks again
frank

yar · 18-10-08

Sheenagh Pugh: Did well in with the words chosen. I second fjp999 would like to see some more of your originals.

sparky71 · 19-10-08

Glad you liked the poem guys. I will post some of my new poems as soon as possible and some extracts of my short stories. Thanks for your'e encouragement in this department(specially you fjp999) its given me a real boost in the confidence I need to carry on writing(Which can be difficult). Big shout out to you all.

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sparky71 Insane Poster Join Date: Oct 2008 Single Bi Man in cardiff (UK - England) Age: 38 (Starsign: Cancer) Posts: 197 Gallery photos (0) My Mood:	The beatifull lie Heard this at a peotry reading last week. Its my favourate poem at the momment and it's written by a published poet who lives in my fair old city Cardiff. Its called the beatiful lie, hope u enjoy. He was about four, I think...it was so long ago. In a garden, he'd done some damage behind a bright screen of sweet peas snapped a stalk, a stake, I dont recall, but the Grandmother came and saw, and asked him "Did you do that?" Now, if she'd said why did you do that, he'd never have denied it. She showed him he had a choice. I could see in his face the new sense, the possible. That word and deed need not match, that you could say the world different to suit you. When he said "NO", I swear it was as moving as the first time a baby's fist clenches on a finger, as momentous as the first taste of fruit. I could feel his eyes looking through a new window at a world whose form and colour weren't fixed but fluid that poured like a snake, trembled around the edges like northen lights, Shape shifted at the spell of a voice. I could sense him filling like a glass, Hear the unreal sea in his ears. THIS IS HOW TO MAKE SONGS, CREATE MEN, PAINT PICTURES, TELL A STORY. I think I made up the screen of sweet peas. Maybe they were beans. maybe there was no screen it just felt as if there should be somehow. And he was my, no, i dont need to tell you that. I know I made up the screen. And I recall very well what he had done. Sheenagh Pugh

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fjp999 Monkey,Back - OFF! Join Date: Oct 2007 Gay Man in an Open Gay Relationship in Sharon (USA) Age: 48 (Starsign: Aquarius) Posts: 4,368 Gallery photos (27) My Mood:	Great poem Sparky. I can understand why it is one of your favs. So simply told and such vivid images and feelings... then the twist at the end brings you into the writers mind... very interesting style and I thank you much for posting it. Please keep posting more and if you dont mind maybe you can post more of your originals even if they arent ready for public viewing... I enjoy seeing how things develop... thanks again frank __________________ I saw Christ last night. His back was turned to me. I whispered His name. He acknowledged me with a twitch of His ears! R.I.P. Neda you will believe and remember forevermore

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yar Cheangeable User Title Join Date: Sep 2008 Gay Man in a Monogamous Gay Relationship in Seattle (USA) Posts: 1,027 Gallery photos (1) My Mood:	Sheenagh Pugh: Did well in with the words chosen. I second fjp999 would like to see some more of your originals.

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sparky71 Insane Poster Join Date: Oct 2008 Single Bi Man in cardiff (UK - England) Age: 38 (Starsign: Cancer) Posts: 197 Gallery photos (0) My Mood:	Glad you liked the poem guys. I will post some of my new poems as soon as possible and some extracts of my short stories. Thanks for your'e encouragement in this department(specially you fjp999) its given me a real boost in the confidence I need to carry on writing(Which can be difficult). Big shout out to you all.