Starting an essay, any ideas how too lol!

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The way that Shane has written this review is in an none judgemental approach which is actually nice to see, seeing that for the most part reviews these days just get slated by critic which h gets really boring to read but in this review Shone keeps you interested by just telling you the bare essentials so not to go bore people whilst reading Shone’s review of Opie’s exhibition.

I changed it to slated as thats the only thing I could think...

you can take my original advice and use "get criticized by critics" if ya dont wanna use slang in a formal paper...

tbh, I am somewhat surprised at the amount of informal language in an essay but I aint no British Uni student in 2009 best of luck sweets