I'm in need of opinions!

[Sui]

I wrote my loving boyfriend a song for Valentine's Day (I'm actually working on getting it recorded too, but I don't see my music teacher much), and I need a few opinions on the lyrics I wrote! The song goes:

Verse 1:

Hello again my love,
I called and I wanted to say'
"I love you, Will, regardless
that you're so far away."

Verse 2:

Thank you for the way,
you shrug at all the stupid sh!t I've done.
You're there to pick me up,
whenever I come undone.

Verse 3 pt a:

I wrote this song for you.
A little tune so you could know,
How much I miss you now,
and wish I could see your radiant glow

Verse 3 pt b:

Just remember that I love you so~

Without you I'd never have made it this far,
So I sit here with my guitar
and say....

"Happy Valentine's Day~"



Sappy? Yes. I know that... and so far the people whom I've showed it to, they said that's the only thing that was 'wrong' with it, was teh fact that it was such a bleeding heart song. So tell me what you think!

Oh... right... and in case you're wondering: guitar's in minor key until the last verse. :tongue: In case you know what I'm talking about and wanted to know.

[michael2008]

Hahaa thats well good!
I'd be proper happy if someone sang that too me!
nice work man.
x

[princealbertofb]

Your boyfriend should be very pleased, especially if he's the romantic kind... And I'm sure he'll be flattered to be the centre of your thoughts and attention.
:heartline:

[Rowan]

aaaaaaaawwwwwwwwwwww !!!!!

I'm sooooo jealous !!

Thats beautiful mate !! good job !
I'm sure he'll LOVE IT !!

[wouldlikemuscle]

Aww Sui, that's well sweet!!! And I'm sure your bf will be in floods of tears of joy hearing it!

[Sui]

:frown: Well... in short: things didn't go well. I never finished recording the song before we broke up...

Se La Vie I guess...

[wouldlikemuscle]

So sorry to hear it Sui.

[Smurlos]

:frown: Your boyfriend obviously doesn't know what he's lost... a guy sweet enough to go through the trouble of a romantic song written and recorded just for him. Save it for someone who is worth the trouble my dear :frown:

*big hugs*

[marshlander]

Hope it's not too painful, but maybe just deliciously sweet enough to make it memorable.

Regards

p.s.

... Save it for someone who is worth the trouble my dear

... But don't forget to change the lyrics unless he's a Will too

[Smurlos]

... But don't forget to change the lyrics unless he's a Will too

Haha but of course, unless you want to end up lonely again!