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When the rubber band snaps
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Third paragraph (verse), second line. The Y is lower case.. fix pls.

If you wrote it.. it's nice! I like it. I can relate to the feelings. The second to last line doesn't seem to fit in though. It's too long. There's also a line too many in the final verse.
I usually hate poems though, so maybe I'm not your best critic.

And I just rudely assumed you made the post to get criticism..
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When the rubber band snaps - by Anonymous - 07-27-2014, 11:17 AM
When the rubber band snaps - by Cuddly - 07-27-2014, 11:23 AM
When the rubber band snaps - by Adam - 07-27-2014, 11:31 AM
When the rubber band snaps - by Cuddly - 07-27-2014, 11:33 AM
When the rubber band snaps - by Adam - 07-27-2014, 11:48 AM
When the rubber band snaps - by LJay - 07-27-2014, 01:31 PM
When the rubber band snaps - by JimmyEcho - 07-27-2014, 02:11 PM
When the rubber band snaps - by 50Plus - 07-27-2014, 03:45 PM
When the rubber band snaps - by JimmyEcho - 07-27-2014, 04:07 PM

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