07-27-2014, 11:23 AM
Third paragraph (verse), second line. The Y is lower case.. fix pls.
If you wrote it.. it's nice! I like it. I can relate to the feelings. The second to last line doesn't seem to fit in though. It's too long. There's also a line too many in the final verse.
I usually hate poems though, so maybe I'm not your best critic.
And I just rudely assumed you made the post to get criticism..
If you wrote it.. it's nice! I like it. I can relate to the feelings. The second to last line doesn't seem to fit in though. It's too long. There's also a line too many in the final verse.
I usually hate poems though, so maybe I'm not your best critic.
And I just rudely assumed you made the post to get criticism..