I just want to share

[Lhan28]

Here is something that I have created, I was planning to make it a song and put a melody on it. I just want to share it with you. If you have any suggestion or some ideas, that would be great. Alright here we go...

Like what others say or famous quote say:

When two hearts are meant for each other, no distance is to far, no time is to long, and no other love can break them apart.

~~~Wherever You Are, You Will Still Be The One~~~

Distance keeps us apart, Your always in my heart
And I will do anything, Just to make you feel complete.
This simple note I have made, I made it because of you.
And I’d hope you would feel, that my love is so sincere.

Wherever you are right now, you will still be the one.
You will never be replace, cause you are my everything.
I’ll just touch the stars, even we are apart.
And I’ll just think of you and everything will be alright.

I’ll wake in the morning while you just starts sleeping.
The hands of our clock seems running differently.
You walk on the sunset while I watch the sunrise.
And even though we are a world apart,
I know someday we’ll be togethere again.

I will always wait for you, Promise this will be true.
And I will just stay the same no matter what it takes.
I will be here for you forever and forever I will LOVE you.
Just promise me you will keep everything that we’ve gone through.


(hope you like it guys, and again if you have ideas and suggestions Im open to it. Thanks)...

[Hardheaded1]

I would love to hear it set to music.

[Lhan28]

Well, Im still trying to figure the melody. I do have 2 kinds of melody on it but it sounds like it doesnt fit. Im getting there though...

[Rareboy]

We'll look forward to the single.

I would dodge the word 'differently' though...it can be tough to wrap notes around and to sing...just a few words and tenses etc. to tidy up in English. I've also broken the lines to give you some sense of the cadence

Distance (may) keep(s) us apart, (but)
You're always in my heart....
And I will (would?) do anything,
Just to make you feel complete.....
This simple note I have made;
I made it because of you.
And I’d (I) hope you would (will) feel, (know?) (believe?)
that my love is so sincere.

Wherever you are right now,
you will still (always?) be the one.
You will never be replaced,
'cause you are my everything.
I’ll just touch (search?) the stars...
even (though) we are apart.
And I’ll just think of you....
(wherever you are)
and everything will be alright.

I’ll wake in the morning
while you just start sleeping. (or...'Just as you go to sleep?')
The hands on our clocks (or...'The hands on your clock'?)
seem (to be) running differently. (or ....'Seem to run opposite to mine'?)
You walk on (into?) the sunset (or...You watch the sun set?)
while I watch the sun rise.
And even though
we are a world apart,
I know someday
we’ll be together again.

I will always wait for you,
(I) Promise this will be true.
And I (my love) will just (always?) stay the same
no matter what it takes.
I will be here for you forever
and forever.....
I will (always) LOVE you.
Just promise me
you will keep everything that we’ve gone through.or 'that you will always hold dear all that we've been through' or 'That you will always love me too)

I think that I don't perhaps quite understand you last line...what would he keep? and how can you keep what you've been through? It also sounds like you've been through an ordeal which isn't very pleasant...so I have suggested just shortneing it to getting him to make you a promise in return.


My agent will be in touch about the credits and the royalties later. lol.

[Lhan28]

I think that I don't perhaps quite understand you last line...what would he keep? and how can you keep what you've been through? It also sounds like you've been through an ordeal which isn't very pleasant...so I have suggested just shortneing it to getting him to make you a promise in return.


My agent will be in touch about the credits and the royalties later. lol.

Well... I just based that into a love story of one of my friend. They have been through a lot of things and even comes to the point of seperating, however they keep their promises to each other. Until my friend and his family decided to go back to there country and his partner left here alone. My friend emailed me the other day and he ask me to compose a song for their 4th year anniversary and he will sing it for his partner and post it on youtube.

Thanks... It really help me.... No worries I’ll put your name on it when Im done ....