I stand

[Cain]

I stand alone, in dark and scared
My heart is all hollow
What was there now a knot in my throat
Waiting for me to swallow


My first english poem attempt. I dont know if this can even be called as poem. :biggrin: I hope it makes sense to you as it makes to mee.

[zeon]

it definately ryhmes

I stand alone in dark and scared My heart is all Hollow What was there is now a knot in my throat waiting for me to swollow.

How i feel deep inside wants to become excited and alive. The taste of spunk from a monk reminds me of times i shagged in a bunk...

Now you do the next verse :-)

[Cain]

More i look less i see
I know for me there is a there
Soon i will be blind to me
i wish i knew i am going where

u are fast. (with ''there is a there'' i meant there is a place)

[DarkDaisuke]

I liked it Reminds me of my old self heheh still it is a poem As long as you call it that thats what matters.

[verse-a-tile]

not bad at all - keep writing mile:

[toomuch45]

i like both of them and yes they definately both rhymemile:

keep going

ooh and btw i loveeee the first one a lot than the second one

[Cain]

Thank you guys. I jsut typied it down because i saw we got a poems section. I got much better stuff in turkish but they lose their thing in translation. :tongue:

[Cain]

they say i will go to hell
they talk so sure of my fate
god made this soul in me dwell
is it possible for him to hate

[princealbertofb]

Could you put one up in Turkish, Cain, so we can see what it looks like... ?
You might also venture a translation even if it's not great...

[Cain]

Could you put one up in Turkish, Cain, so we can see what it looks like... ?
You might also venture a translation even if it's not great...

You didnt like my english attempts? :biggrin: