"I am From..." Poem...feed back?

[Kenny221]

So, today I had my first English class of the school year! YAY!

Now, we're assigned to do a " I am from" poem where we need to describe bits of ourselves using locations... Any feed back would be nice.(btw it's a free verse so it doesn't have to follow any rules of that sort)

I Am From
I am from starbucks,
where I've drowned myself in caffeine and sugar,
where casual "Good morning"'s or "Hey"'s are constantly exchanged.
The constant "BUZZ" in the background,
Footsteps, background chatters, and soft music are constantly there
yet inspiration flows through my mind like coffee down my throat.

I am from Burnaby North,
where I've forged friendships that would last a life time,
where laughter and cheers fill the halls.
The place that made me feel like the purpose of my life are in the eyes of
strangers and friends.

I am from the little computer screen that sits in my room,
where I've promised to help others as they had helped me.
To help those with the same pain , confusion and insecurity.
Where the only noise that can be heard are "ping" followed by "tatatatatata"

[Dan1980]

A great poem Kenny.

[Dreamer]

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