Personal Statement Feedback

[HumbleTangerine]

Hi! I'll be applying to some universities in Scottland soon and for the first time in my life I've written a personal statement. We don't have these in Sweden so I have never really gotten any real assistance other than from various internet sources. Since this is a vital part when it comes to my future I'm looking to get as much feedback from, well anyone really, as I can. If you feel up to it I'm interested to hear your thoughts and your criticism whether it be minor grammatical errors or "you really messed up that one part".

I figured, if you're interested in giving me some feedback you can just say so in a comment and I'll send the thing in a private message

[PenguinPecker]

If only I was good at important things. If you want, I can go over it for grammatical and spelling errors. I'm pretty good at that!
But it has to be English, of course! lol

[Lilitu]

I've been writing like a million of these over the past few months!

You can send one to me, I'll help as much as I can.

[ChrisD]

I suppose my only qualification is that I've written a college essay and I'm generally a good writer, but I'd be glad to help. I can be mean when looking over other people's writing, though

[MisterTinkles]

I have not done anything like this type of letter before, but I have revised many resumes over the past 15 years.

If no one else can help out, I can see what I can do.........if you want.